[Formal Email] Self Introduction
Subject: Self-introduction email
Dear Professor Brad,
Dear Professor Brad,
I am
writing this email to introduce myself as your student of Technical
Communication 1. My name is Tay Wei Hao, a year 1 student at Singapore
Institute of Technology (SIT), pursuing a degree in Telematics (Intelligent
Transportation System Engineering). I have previously graduated with a Diploma
in Electronics, Computer & Communications Engineering at Nanyang Polytechnic.
With my diploma,
I went on to work in the transport sector as an assistant project engineer for four
years. The four years was an eye-opening experience for me. Dealing with multiple
large-scale projects, I have experienced first-hand how projects are implemented
and executed in a timely, safely and cost-effective way. Learning and understanding
the importance of each project phase from requirements, design, installation, testing
to opening was crucial as well. And that is just the tip of the iceberg. As not
all projects are always smooth sailing, it can be quite the challenge. With the
desire to attain more technical knowledge and achieve better career advancement,
I made the decision to further my studies in this field with SIT.
In terms
of my communication strengths, I had the opportunity during my four years of
work to chair regular meetings with contractors and stakeholders. Through this,
I was able to not just discuss with them on the progress of the project and resolving
technical issues, but also to interact with them and practice my interpersonal
skills. I also get a chance to witness and try to model from my superiors and
senior management on how they speak assertively to achieve the desired outcome.
In terms
of my communication weaknesses, when speaking in front of a large group
especially during presentations, I still tend to lose composure. Speaking too
quickly and not articulating words clearly and fluently. This can be ineffective
as the audience could miss out on key points and lose interest of the
presentation.
My goal
in SIT is not just to improve on my technical knowledge, but also to develop my
effectiveness in communication skills from this module. Another aspect is to gain more confidence
in speaking to large groups as presentation skills play a key part in my
career. Another goal would be to improve my interpersonal skills. As I have
worked with multiple contractors and stakeholders including my own team and
colleagues, I always believed that working together cohesively will always get
the best results.
With the
relevant knowledge learnt through this module, I am confident that I will be
able to improve my effectiveness in communication skills and apply it to
my career ahead.
Sincerely,
Tay Wei
Hao
Edited 13 October 2019
Edited 13 October 2019
Hi Wei Hao,
ReplyDeleteI find your introduction letter very interesting. You elaborate more in every factors and you did a good job. I hope you are able to overcome your weakness at the end of this module. :)
Dear Wei Hao,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this clear, well-developed and informative letter. There's an indication of your sincerity in this letter as you've provided enough concrete details about your former job experience and how that connects to your communication skills that we readers learn something significant about who you are. From reading this I'd suggest that you have lots to share with your coursemates, and I look forward to you serving as a leader for your project team in this module.
In terms of your module goals, you've made it clear that oral presentation and interpersonal skills
are your focus, and we will certainly address the former directly. I also realize that writing development may not be the highest items on your list, but I offer this feedback in any case:
1. sentence structure
-- Throughout the four years was an eye-opening experience to me. > (need for 'throughout'? What is the main subject?) ?
-- Speaking too quickly and not articulate words clearly and fluently. > (sentence fragment/lack of parallel structure)
-- To gain more confidence in speaking to large groups, as presentation skills play a key part in my career. > (sentence fragment) ?
2. wording/phrasing
-- my four year > (plural) ?
-- I am confident that I will be able to improve my effectiveness in communication skills and applying it into my career ahead. > (lack of parallel verb structures)
3. the use of capital letters
-- I went on to work in the Transport sector as an Assistant Project Engineer for four years.
see https://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/capital.asp
This term I look forward to learning more about your work as a project engineer as well as what some of the key demands are in the workplace from your point of view.
Best wishes,
Brad
Dear Professor Brad,
DeleteThank you for your constructive comments and feedback.
I am certainly lacking in the form of writing and I do appreciate your help in this module to guide me along and develop in this aspect.
I have also amended my sentence structures, wording/phrasing as well as my overuse of capital letters in the formal letter.
Looking forward to learning more from you.
Warmest regards,
Wei Hao